[GALLERY] Haxx

[English Mobster]

COMIX!!!
7/22/09 (First day of publication, many comics made):
http://www.modacity.net/forums/picture.php?albumid=133&pictureid=949
http://www.modacity.net/forums/picture.php?albumid=133&pictureid=950
http://www.modacity.net/forums/picture.php?albumid=133&pictureid=951
http://www.modacity.net/forums/picture.php?albumid=133&pictureid=952
http://www.modacity.net/forums/picture.php?albumid=133&pictureid=953
7/23/09:
http://www.modacity.net/forums/picture.php?albumid=133&pictureid=954
7/24/09 (Style change!):
http://www.modacity.net/forums/picture.php?albumid=133&pictureid=966
7/25/09:
http://www.modacity.net/forums/picture.php?albumid=133&pictureid=968

Haxx is going to be my semi-daily webcomic. I took some inspiration from xkcd when making it, yes, but it really actually came from some doodles I made in class my Sophomore year, before I had discovered xkcd.
All multi-panel comics are ~512x2048 (that's why they're in the spoiler tags), single panels are ~512x512.
It stars 4 main characters ATM: The Whitehat hacker, his gf, and the Blackhat hacker and his gf.

[klange]

Heh, well, you've already far surpassed my attempt at a webcomic (http://entropy.phpwnage.com/).

[teh lag]

The jokes are very predictable. Work on those. I also suggest you try to distance yourself from XKCD - you've just about got a total copy of the art and joke style (though not nearly as well implemented, and it's this that hurts you).

[English Mobster]

I just found one more I hadn't posted yet.
Though, looking back, I'm not sure if I made the punchline clear enough... =/
Updating the first post.
E: Whoa, I guess I should have refreshed before I hit the post button. I didn't even realize anyone had posted in here. Thanks for the advice, Lag, I'll work on it.
DoubleE: I think I just found a way to improve the punchline. Hold on a second.
TripleE: Updated version up.

[Heathen]

What lag said

[Newbkilla]

Heh, well, you've already far surpassed my attempt at a webcomic (http://entropy.phpwnage.com/).

What the Hell? Where do you go to school? I have that same planner, with the same fun fact at the bottom about the toilet paper.

[English Mobster]

It is technically tomorrow now (12:20 AM), so first off:


Welcome to the future!
I've posted a new comic. Go ahead and check it out, let me know what you think.

[Heathen]

I never found xkcd funny. Tldr and it washes up the jokes. I don't like being sodomized with long jokes and what not.

[Ganon]

The art style is pretty bad, but you seem to have some idea towards the humor.

[Reaper Man]

Ugh, terrible. Try something other than stick figures, it's overused. The jokes are crude and predictable and the stick figures are badly drawn, the ones on XKCD actually have a little bit of personality going on, since they're drawn with a little bit of thought.

[ICEE]

The third one was the best one. It's relatable and thats what makes it funny, However I wouldn't suggest going for xkcd's style. Its very smart humor that people like heathen would never understand.

:)

[English Mobster]

http://www.modacity.net/forums/picture.php?albumid=133&pictureid=963
Better? Yes or no?

[English Mobster]

OK, another comic showcasing the new art style will be up in a few seconds (after I upload it).
I must warn you, though, this one is a little bit... Different, both in terms of showing off the new art style, content, and the fact that it has Islamic Extremists. I'll possibly upload another one with the regular 'ol main characters later today, considering how I've already made such radical a departure 7 strips in.

[English Mobster]

As the people digging through my profile have noticed, I've made another comic for today (meant to post it 2 hours ago, got sidetracked by Youtube videos).
http://www.modacity.net/forums/picture.php?albumid=133&pictureid=968
In the words of Advancebo, it's "Failhalla".
r aFor the record, I am TRYING to draw badly. I don't have a tablet, no, and I DO have a copy of Photoshop (not installed on this Windows 7 installation though), but I'm using MS Paint for the purposes of the comic. But I really should stick to drawing simple things, as it looks better, IMO.I'm lonely.

[Reaper Man]

Better? Yes or no?
No, not at all. Still terribly drawn stick figures, with absolutely no room for being expressive with them, all they can possibly do is stand there. Try hand-drawing your comics, because frankly, these current ones that look like they were drawn in flash are absolutely mediocre.

A cartoon isn't funny merely for its words - you may as well just post the junk in your comics, what makes a cartoon funny is how one combines words with the drawings, expressing whatever is going on in some exaggerated way, for example. Your "characters" just stand there. Even Cyanide and Happiness cartoons have expressions and XKCD stick figures have poses.

And don't think I'm attacking you directly - I'm just being extremely blunt. My father is a cartoonist, and he's taught me a fair few things.

[teh lag]

For the record, I am TRYING to draw badly. I don't have a tablet, no, and I DO have a copy of Photoshop (not installed on this Windows 7 installation though), but I'm using MS Paint for the purposes of the comic. But I really should stick to drawing simple things, as it looks better, IMO.

Don't do that. It's not working for you. Even if your jokes had potential, it'd be impossible to tell and would be all lost because your delivery is absolutely lacking.
Delivery is, imo, even more important than the joke itself. Intentionally poor art only works under certain circumstances and you are not meeting those circumstances. I suggest you drop that direction and find a new one if you want to improve your quality.

[Ganon]

This is getting painfull... Maybe comics aren't your thing. You know?

[English Mobster]

Alright. I'll try doing these again by hand, then. Let's see how it works out.
Maybe you guys are right and comics aren't my thing.