Re: The Studio Quick-Crit Thread
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mech
This thread needs to be split.
Well, I'm going to be playing at a show Oct 31st and need crit on a some I'm working on. It's a little sloppy because I was improvising different Ideas, I want to know what you guys think.
Ignore that last minute or so.
http://www.filefront.com/14729007/scoop4.wma
Would you rave to this? There's going to be alot of people and I want to get them moving.
There is little to no bass here. Check this out. Yours is like a higher quality version of the background music in like Sim City or something I'd expect as the background music for an RTS. The sound is interesting, but you want to work the woofers a lot more if you want to get people moving.
Re: The Studio Quick-Crit Thread
I'm going to have this hooked up to a half stack, thing is, I'm using a cheap 100 dollar keyboard and can only play 1 sound at a time, hence the lack of bass. But, I can mix two sounds together to make a deeper tone which gives the impression of bass, so it should be pretty good.
What do you think off the over all jams though?
Re: The Studio Quick-Crit Thread
3973 Polies.:realsmug:
Model complete i guess unless anyone here can give tips and advice on any issues you might see with it.http://i33.tinypic.com/kaqwjm.png
Re: The Studio Quick-Crit Thread
giant feet, skinny ankles.
Re: The Studio Quick-Crit Thread
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Originally Posted by
neuro
giant feet, skinny ankles.
Anything else i should work on while doing the ankles?
Re: The Studio Quick-Crit Thread
Quote:
Originally Posted by
mech
This thread needs to be split.
Well, I'm going to be playing at a show Oct 31st and need crit on a some I'm working on. It's a little sloppy because I was improvising different Ideas, I want to know what you guys think.
Ignore that last minute or so.
http://www.filefront.com/14729007/scoop4.wma
Would you rave to this? There's going to be alot of people and I want to get them moving.
There are things in here that are addressed in your post, but to make sure I don't make any holes, I'll list whatever I heard. Number of things:
1. Lead is awfully sloppy (rhythmically speaking). I assume you recorded yourself with a MIDI keyboard?
2. Lead could be up an octave. In the lower range used, it tends to blend in with the chords. Depending on what system is used at the show, it could be nearly impossible to hear it.
3. Lead needs less echo. In the more complicated sections, it just sounded like a glissing mess.
4. Drums could use more fills. What I mean by this is rather than just "bass, snare/clap, bass, scare/clap," feel free to put a unique fill at the end of each set (8 measures, 16 measures, or the end of a particular phrase.) Actually, you could probably add another beat into the normal line (use cymbal/hi hat on an "and" maybe?).
5. Be VERY careful with your embellishing tones. There were a couple of notes in there that just sounded plain wrong, improv or not. Be mindful of the key (things like dominant 7th would be alright), and if it's going pretty far off key, either use it with chromaticism or resolve it ASAP.
6. Tritones: Use responsibly. :gonk:
7. Repetition: Good in short bursts. Don't let things go on for too long, and certainly don't toss them out after one run.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Musical_form
Forms are an easy way of repeating ideas without monotony. Depending on how long this is, you could go from simple AABA to something lolhueg like AABACABA.
Re: The Studio Quick-Crit Thread
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Originally Posted by
neuro
giant feet, skinny ankles.
His boots are huge, his feet inside the boots appear to be on over an inch of platform, so I wouldn't say it's his feet that are huge, and therefore the ankles don't seem that skinny to me if you think of his actual foot size.
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3973 Polies.:realsmug:
Model complete i guess unless anyone here can give tips and advice on any issues you might see with it.
*img*
He looks like he has 70's platform boots on.
Re: The Studio Quick-Crit Thread
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paladin
He looks like he has 70's platform boots on.
The boots he has on normaly look like that sadly.
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That may be, but they are not as apparent as yours.