Quick-Crit 2008-2009

The QC Thread is a place for your most current works of any kind or any game and get quick advice. Why use this instead of a [GALLERY] thread or a WIP thread in another section? You can post your projects in their own thread if you want, but if you want fast advice on a smaller project, this is the place for you. This is not a place for you to dump all your work (It's not a big truck), but rather a place for work that doesn't require a whole thread in the Studio. That being said, please avoid posting loads of images. Keep that to your [GALLERY] threads. Essentially, this is like the good ol' Offtopic Gallery Thread minus all crap that plagued it and its sibling in the CE section.

So here are the rules:

• This is not a [GALLERY] thread, only post your most current work that does not require a whole thread.
• Make sure your images are big enough to crit, not too dark, and remember that wireframes for models are helpful.
• Images larger than the page size must be put in [shot] tags.
• Use [spoiler] tags sparingly; it's annoying having to click to open and view every single one of your images.
• Last but not least, no shitposting. This thread's been going good so far, don't ruin it.

Let's see some work!

p0lar edit:

Please note the following addition to the AUP as of 2/17:

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CRITIQUE

Keep in mind that there are professional artists, modelers, writers, animators, etc in this community who have taken college courses and have degrees in varied areas. When posting your work for critique, please specify if you are looking for professional advice to make it as perfect as it can get, or if you just want a basic rundown to improve your work.

• When asking for professional critique, you are opening yourself up to comments that you may find mean or rough. Feel free to inquire further or challenge the critic if they're too vague or you disagree, but do not retaliate to these comments (i.e: "fuck off, it took me X days to make this what do you know"), as this is normal in the professional world, and retaliating in such a way makes you look incompetent.
• If asking for basic advice, make sure to specify what the final role of the work will be. Is it an artistic piece? Will it be going into a game?

If you do not specify what kind of advice you'd like, it will be considered by default that you are looking for a professional review.

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Map I've been working on with Duce.

Name is Haven, I'm gonna make a thread when I get further along.
http://i118.photobucket.com/albums/o...omeworklol.jpg
http://i118.photobucket.com/albums/o...havenbase3.jpg
http://i118.photobucket.com/albums/o...havenbase2.jpg
http://i118.photobucket.com/albums/o...s/unoitfoo.jpg
I've done quite a bit of the terrain, but in general, if it looks good, it's Duce.

I would make the center "panel" in (each one of those sections of 3 on the big wall) have some little detail extruded out somehow to break the pattern.

Reminds me of Valhalla in a good way.

Jesus mass. Your work is incredible. I can't wait till this map is finished. From what I can tell, theres nothing really that needs fixing. It's overall amazing :awesome:

I love it.

Also, good idea for a thread, Con. :haw:

This is my current lyrical project, and I'm just looking for any other writers' (and anyone else's') opinions and constructive criticism on what I've done so far. I still need to update it in my gallery topic (link in my signature), but that will come later, probably after I'm done with it for the foreseeable future. Of course I'll work on it much later in time, but that's not the point right now. I just want to know what anyone thinks about it. I still have to write the second and third verses (as seen by the exes). I still feel unsure about the addendum (last two verses) due to the fact that their timing is completely off when compared to the rest of the song, but I'm thinking about having them as spoken/whispered/mumbled verse rather than sung. If anyone has questions about this particular work's meaning, feel free to ask.

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Remind me how to stand again
I'm sure I can't on my own
Tracing lines you've left behind
Chasing your trail alone

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Even though I feel this way
I'll believe what you say

Loosing my balance
You pull me in
Sleepwalk my way
Into your daydream

Even though I feel this way
I'll believe what you say
You say I'm not dying / Lend me strength - Remind me
You say I'm not dying / Lead me through - Your reverie

Treading through the fallen petals
Your ocean drawing nearer
I see the wind run through the trees
But I don't feel your breeze on me

Squinting into the distant sun
I rescind my dreams
Blinded by the sharp reflections
I can't be reached by your fading shine

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I like the idea you've got, but crazy connor likes rhymes >_>

*rhymes :eng101:

I'm giving you crit on your spelling.

Amazing lyrics man. Would I be assuming to much to say that Tool and A Perfect Circle are your favourite bands?