Quick-Crit 2008-2009

[MetKiller Joe]

What is it?

[=sw=warlord]

What is it?

im intending it to be a hybrid forerunner antenna mix between the structures on the bridge in halowars cutscene "walk in the park" and the arial found in A30.

[MetKiller Joe]

It doesn't seem very forerunner to me. There isn't much to it, so I'm wondering if this is part of something larger? Or if that is the final product; in which case, there isn't much to crit on.

[Newbkilla]

Hardly any detail, doesn't look much forerunner, the spikes at the top are not pretty, because forerunner doesn't have points that, that.. Pointy.. So, I suggest adding some detail here and there, completing more, and remove the spikes.

[ThePlague]

Never make spikes with forerunner, just leave it round but thin. If you'd show the whole area of whatever it is you're making it'd be easier to crit. Right now it looks horribly basic and very boring. Do what Newbkilla said, add details.

[=sw=warlord]

Hardly any detail, doesn't look much forerunner, the spikes at the top are not pretty, because forerunner doesn't have points that, that.. Pointy.. So, I suggest adding some detail here and there, completing more, and remove the spikes.

the spikes are on a few of the buildings for a30_A and a30_B, which was part of the reson i did that.

[Newbkilla]

Well, it looks ugly anyway.. Fix it.

[klange]

New stuff on the thing I try to pass off as a webcomic despite lack of comic appeal.

[kid908]

does this look like a real diamond? how can i improve it so it looks more...real?

[ThePlague]

To me it's too see-through. That's all I think is wrong with it.