Quick-Crit 2008-2009

[MetKiller Joe]

WIP. Boba pointed out to me that the thing on the butt of the stock is supposed to be a button/clip thing, which makes sense because it would allow the stock to fold. So I'll fix that. Yes, there's a bit of stretching in areas too. Any thing else I don't see, or any good ideas for it?

Hand grip is a bit too blocky. Also, the skin looks a bit bland without scratches. I see some, but they are a bit too subtle.

[Roostervier]

I could up the opacity. I'll try that.

[neuro]

He's talking about normal mapping.

not directly, but since normalmaps are made the exact same way, and you only really just need to bake out a template, yes i guess you can bake out a normalmap.

[itszutak]

My only complaint-- texture is stretched there and would look like crap in first person.

[BobtheGreatII]

My only complaint-- texture is stretched there and would look like crap in first person.

l2read

He already said he knew about the stretching and that he was going to fix it.

[Roostervier]

Never actually said I'd fix it, and you actually don't notice it in first person because of the angle its at. I may fix it, but the uvs are kind of compact, and there's not much room for expansion.

[Reaper Man]

So, uh http://feignphoto.com/newtemplate/index.html

The bio and contact pages are done, the flash-based gallery will be up soon. What should I do for the front page? I was thinking having 1 main photo (that maybe cycles - java based slideshow or something) and some sort of greeting message...

Anyway, crit for the whole website, welcomed. The URL is obviously temporary, as I don't wanna take my current website offline just because I'm testing this new layout.

[MetKiller Joe]

So, uh http://feignphoto.com/newtemplate/index.html

The bio and contact pages are done, the flash-based gallery will be up soon.

Don't make people wait for your website to load.

LightBox 2
FrogJS

LightBox supports multiple galleries per page, but FrogJS only supports one. I've heard there are ways to get FrogJS to instance on a page with frames, but I've never tried it.

The benefit of FrogJS is that the gallery is just there. No need for the user to click and wait (all images can be preloaded).

As for the Bio site, very nice photo, but I'd go with something that shows your face. The purpose of that picture, I presume, is to show yourself; don't make whoever looks at it guess how you may look.

As for the front-page. I wouldn't put anything fancy there. A description that can be read in 5-10 seconds with 12-14 pt font. I'd have a link to your porfolio as well.

If you hand your card to somebody, and tell them "Look at this website for my work," make it easy on their time because they won't spend more than 30 seconds looking at the site as a preview (then if they like what they see they will continue).

I'd add some more CSS to the links at the bottom (when you hover over them, they light up), and for the contact page I'd do the same. It wasn't obvious that those were links (I would use a simple font there and preload the images).

Lots of small things, but they all kinda collude, so I'd fix 'em.

Ivan Feign is an 18 year old, self-taught photographer who, at the age of 15, first picked up a camera, and, A[just a suggestion] after getting his first DSLR on his 16th birthday, he was completely hooked on photography.
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Since then he has, on top of his creative photography, covered events such as proms, performances [which ones; link would be nice] and commercial advertisements [example? link would be nice].

Ivan mainly uses his DSLRs for his photography. However, for artistic endeavors [don't use complex language to describe something simple; e.g. (artistic photography)], he uses repertoire film cameras. Ivan usually uses color slide films such as Velvia and Ektachrome. He uses as well as Ilford films for black and white photography.
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Ivan will be studying photography at Savannah College of Art and Design as a cohort of the class of 2013 where he hopes to delve deeper into the world of photography [again, use simple language; (learn more about and practice his photography).

[Reaper Man]

Don't make people wait for your website to load.

LightBox 2
FrogJS

LightBox supports multiple galleries per page, but FrogJS only supports one. I've heard there are ways to get FrogJS to instance on a page with frames, but I've never tried it.

The benefit of FrogJS is that the gallery is just there. No need for the user to click and wait (all images can be preloaded).

As for the Bio site, very nice photo, but I'd go with something that shows your face. The purpose of that picture, I presume, is to show yourself; don't make whoever looks at it guess how you may look.

As for the front-page. I wouldn't put anything fancy there. A description that can be read in 5-10 seconds with 12-14 pt font. I'd have a link to your porfolio as well.

If you hand your card to somebody, and tell them "Look at this website for my work," make it easy on their time because they won't spend more than 30 seconds looking at the site as a preview (then if they like what they see they will continue).

I'd add some more CSS to the links at the bottom (when you hover over them, they light up), and for the contact page I'd do the same. It wasn't obvious that those were links (I would use a simple font there and preload the images).

Lots of small things, but they all kinda collude, so I'd fix 'em.

The photo is sorta temp, it was the only nice one I could find. I'll take a self portrait soon, since I also need one for my Student ID at SCAD. I was thinking of adding a glow to the links at the bottom on mouseover.

I'll look into those galleries, thanks. This is the one I was looking at though, I like it because it can have multiple galleries http://flash-gallery.com/zen-flash-gallery/demo/

E: Wow, lightbox looks pretty sweet too, I hope you can disable the blackout when you click the image, as it sorta defeats the purpose of the design of my website (photo studio/projector backdrop)

I'll look into it tomorrow. I've got a cold and it's 1:50am. I need some sleep.

[Huero]

Concept for a Netbook OS such as Moblin; this screen would be accessed by clicking "Applications" at the bottom, then "Internet" and then "Browser." I am aware that the dimensions of certain objects (sidebar, for example) are fucked.
e: Oh, and this is just the layout. Final product would NOT look like this, though the layout would remain (having used all the constructive criticism possible, of course)