Quick-Crit 2008-2009

[Con]

I'd leave the shineys to halo's shader and only lightly on the skin.

[Chainsy]

Well...the model looks good, not much on the skin to crit, go look at worn metals, since human hands have a oil on them that would cause after long exposure some dullness, plus treat the metal as you would on a sword, theyre basically the same thing, so it would have battle scratches and peeling paint if it has any on it. The plastic parts would be worn down, any kind of textured grip will be worn off in places from the sweat and oil of hands....umh... the opening of the light saber would be scorched, and the top part where the laser emites would prolly be a heavier, denser metal, while the main handle would be a lighter one that is thinner.

[Heathen]

Cool site Reaper.

[Reaper Man]

Thanks guys! No criticisms?

[PenGuin1362]

it sucks clever design

Actually the bio needs some work. It just sounds odd. If you'd like I can help ya out with writing that.

[DEElekgolo]

The texture could use a little cross hatch. If you look at some of the forerunner textures in halo 3, there is a little cross hatching going on in the texture.

[Reaper Man]

it sucks clever design

Actually the bio needs some work. It just sounds odd. If you'd like I can help ya out with writing that.

That'd be cool. I hate writing about myself, augh.

[MetKiller Joe]

Here is some stuff I wrote about the site a while back. I critted the bio as well:

So, uh http://feignphoto.com/newtemplate/index.html

The bio and contact pages are done, the flash-based gallery will be up soon.

Don't make people wait for your website to load.

LightBox 2
FrogJS

LightBox supports multiple galleries per page, but FrogJS only supports one. I've heard there are ways to get FrogJS to instance on a page with frames, but I've never tried it.

The benefit of FrogJS is that the gallery is just there. No need for the user to click and wait (all images can be preloaded).

As for the Bio site, very nice photo, but I'd go with something that shows your face. The purpose of that picture, I presume, is to show yourself; don't make whoever looks at it guess how you may look.

As for the front-page. I wouldn't put anything fancy there. A description that can be read in 5-10 seconds with 12-14 pt font. I'd have a link to your porfolio as well.

If you hand your card to somebody, and tell them "Look at this website for my work," make it easy on their time because they won't spend more than 30 seconds looking at the site as a preview (then if they like what they see they will continue).

I'd add some more CSS to the links at the bottom (when you hover over them, they light up), and for the contact page I'd do the same. It wasn't obvious that those were links (I would use a simple font there and preload the images).

Lots of small things, but they all kinda collude, so I'd fix 'em.

Ivan Feign is an 18 year old, self-taught photographer who, at the age of 15, first picked up a camera, and, A[just a suggestion] after getting his first DSLR on his 16th birthday, he was completely hooked on photography.
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Since then he has, on top of his creative photography, covered events such as proms, performances [which ones; link would be nice] and commercial advertisements [example? link would be nice].

Ivan mainly uses his DSLRs for his photography. However, for artistic endeavors [don't use complex language to describe something simple; e.g. (artistic photography)], he uses repertoire film cameras. Ivan usually uses color slide films such as Velvia and Ektachrome. He uses as well as Ilford films for black and white photography.
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Ivan will be studying photography at Savannah College of Art and Design as a cohort of the class of 2013 where he hopes to delve deeper into the world of photography [again, use simple language; (learn more about and practice his photography).

[Reaper Man]

So, dumb it down? Really? >_>

[MetKiller Joe]

So, dumb it down? Really? >_>

Excuse me?