Danes going through the Tool stage atm :/
It's got nothing to do with my musical interest and you know it. It's you accepting your lack of lyrical ability as an intentional simplicity, your unwillingness to gain insight and extend your thinking and you rejecting my criticism as if it were jaded "wannabe different" regurgitation.
Right now, your lyrics are nothing but empty words. That's a judgment call and I'm making it. It's nothing to do with being different, it's about YOU, being yourself as best as you possibly can. Right now, these lyrics aren't you.
It just seems like you got stuck in that loop of rhyming every word, basically limiting you creatively and also forces your lyrics to become nothing more than tricky rhymes. Anyone can string dark words together and rhyme them. Sure, tell yourself they actually mean something, if that's what helps.
I bet you sat there when you were writing those lyrics going "hmm what rhymes with [insert word here]" didn't you? Pondering the rhyming of 2 words, while the whole point you started out with gets thrown out the window. But that's ok! All intention has been lost, that's all!
Your lyrics are hollow. Write a song about it.
How can you say that Dane, they mean something if you read them!
They do, if you look at them in a textual sense, but on that higher level, they're just neatly strung together words. No attention to syllables, no focus on pronunciation, which, in the end, limits much of your music to a standard signature beat, because it has to fall within that range you limited it to.
Just the written textual interpretation of the word, which makes them just that, words.
You told me the other day Bodie that you wanted people to bounce shit off you, to tell you honestly. There it is.
Oh, and just fyi, I appreciate The Cure and A Perfect Circle on the same level as Tool. I like the Cure because it expands more with tone colour and they make REAL mood music. When they're angry, they make angry music, if they're happy, they make happy music. The natural trend these days for metal and progressive stuff seams to be make angry music all the time, no matter your mood. That is grade A fake fan forced pre heated steam cooked shit at it's best, and you all lap it up like "kittens under a cow udder" because you think your angry at things.
I love A Perfect Circle more for it's guitars and the diversity in the structure of a song above the lyrical content.
I just happen to be more fond with tool music as of late because it's music that has actually been openly honest to me, and allows me to grab my own experience from it. It's the only music I've heard that allows me to do that.
but the thing is mate i'll take ideas and bounce things off you as long as you give me something to work with, it's a bit draining man when where in a 2 person driven band with me being the only one show caseing my works, my opinions and my style and having it taken to with an axe, without anything put in to fill the void from you.
like cmon man the last 3 times i've picked ya up and we went to jam you've just played Tool songs or a perfect circles.
i want to see your ideas as well.
and i know your ideals and certain things that you stand for seem very hollow to me as well. so where about 50 50 on those things.
as seen here
and to me thats different for the sake of being different which is exactly the same as all the other tards doing the same thing. and thats what i hate.
Give me something to work with man so i can appreciate your imput more. Because atm my shits changing yet it's not because of your influence or imput.
i want someone to fight me every step of the way but i want them to throw out there own works and say "this is how i think it should be done, because of blah blah blah."
not just Dont like, generic, needs to be weirder.
you two sound like an old married couple lol...
but im pretty sure most bands don't start like this.
but while were exaimining each other.. zilla sounds like hes too into himself, and dano sounds complicated in a way simillar to one of my friends. (not gonna even bother trying to explain it, cuz he won't want anyone too anyway)
On the other hand i dont understand why anyone would be worrying about how they look in a band yet until they've actually made some music and have to worry about presentation, even then I'm pretty sure i'd still wear the same shit i wear now, possibly try to wear something thats related to how i feel about the music and our views...
I have no musical talents what-so-ever tho other than my attempts at singing and playing guitar, so these are all things ill prolly never have to worry about at least until i get married and my wife starts telling me what to wear...
I could agree with this partially mainly because, the song needs to be written first along with vocal sounds, words come later.Right now, your lyrics are nothing but empty words. That's a judgment call and I'm making it.
Its music not poetry, poetry is where we put words together to describe feelings indirectly or directly (by my own definition...) music on the other hand is sound. Ther is no reason they cant go hand in hand tho, the thing is if u wanna write a song the sound really needs to come first before the words, otherwise u get problems.
My question would be is, do u have real vocals to go with those words, if you do, then you've got a song, otherwise they ARE just words.
Jus a question actually... zilla obviously does lyrics, do you play guitar too? or what? and dane what do you do? guitar? or do you do lyrics too?
Last edited by Apoc4lypse; September 15th, 2008 at 02:08 AM.
Good post.
Combining the use of the sound with the words that hold the lyrics provides a better, more whole medium for the message to travel on.
Sometimes lyrics can take a difference stance though, like for instance the band Puscifer, 90 percent of the sensible side of the lyrics are just banter, but MJK constructed the lyrics to use the sounds words make, rather than focus on the actual meaning of the words.
"Out to work my train at the railway station,
Shotgun Betty stoppin' dead at my shoes.
Out to run the train at the railway station,
Shotgun Betty stoppin' dead at my shoes.
Cock on lockdown, she said learn the damn alphabet.
I come before you, get to payin' your dues.
Head down to the town to get on this puscifer,
time to roll call, kids hear the school bell ring.
This vagina mine teach ya patient diligence.
Keep the chain-gangs waiting, make a cat-bird sing.
Down this vagina mine..."
Note the syllables and vowels carefully, you'll see what I mean.
Even though there isn't much message held there, theres still an applied level of thinking to take things further.
Also IMPORTANT WATCH:
Oh and by the way Apoc, I play guitar and I write a bit of lyrics but I don't really write as much as I should. I'm probably best at my singing if anything.
Last edited by DaneO'Roo; September 15th, 2008 at 07:27 AM.
i actually do have tunes in my head and a projected path for the vocal direction when i write the song, however actually getting the tune thats in my head to the guitar is a little difficult sometimes :/
and yes, we are an old married couple lol, it's part of knowing him what nearly 13 years now?
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